Showcase: Flat to Sparkling - The two men were walking around in the jungle.....

This piece written by Anumita Shringi. A wonderful piece of writing! Great job!

FLAT :

The two men were walking around in the jungle. It was very hot and humid. There were lots of birds and animals and stuff.                         

Sparkling:

Two burly men were passing through a jungle. One wore a mustard yellow hat, shirt and shorts with a long pair of ochre coloured leather boots. The other man wore a copper coloured hat with a feather on it, shirt and shorts and a long pair of leather boots. With their imperial moustaches and heavy huge black guns hung on their shoulders they looked very fierce. The jungle was thick with brushwood. There were many stories of people who had passed through this jungle and were never found. Now everyone was scared of this jungle. But, still the two men were moving confidently as if it was a cakewalk to cross that jungle. 
The Sun's rays were blistering. It was also very humid. But still one could see an animal here and there. The birds were on the trees and the animals were sleeping under the huge canopy. The fauna and flora of the jungle was quite impressive.